The Birthday Suit

 

 

 

 

 

 

The Birthday Suit

 

Naked, entwined

Limbs and muscles

Breathing

Skin stretched

Silver, and singing

Happy birthday, my love

Happy birthday to you

 

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12 Responses to The Birthday Suit

  1. marc nash says:

    i want to come celebrate birthdays round your place!

  2. Peter Newman says:

    It’s sort of intimate and light at the same time. I like the line “skin stretched silver.”

  3. John Wiswell says:

    One I would not sing around the birthday cake…

  4. Helen Howell says:

    This was poetic, and a Happy Birthday to you!

  5. Kath says:

    It felt like the words flowed the way a hand or a look would over a naked body. I love the line ‘skin stretched silver’ and really like how this unashamedly celebrates the body. Happy Birthday, Tom!

  6. Happy Birthday! Yours sounds much more…er… sensual than mine! Like the skin stretched silver. Peace…

  7. Steve Green says:

    Evocative, and suggestive.

    Happy birthday Tom, have a good one. :)

  8. Aidan Fritz says:

    The “skin stretched, silver and singing” are nice lines. Captures a sense of growing old in camaraderie.

  9. Brinda says:

    Happy birthday Tom – lovely poem – all the sensual entwining and then the surprise birthday wish at the end.

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